one lonely night

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

One lonely day the was a stomp on the ground then the chair was moving ow no then i sure some one coming

What are we going to do then i sure the person
the were in a hospital bed was the cry nose it and
girl with a cut in the leg

We need a first aid kit i look like a hospital  the
could be a first aid here then fight maybe not it’s
a really old hospital so i don’t think you will

but the the girl stranded up and looked
like a Zomba so I ran away screaming the hall
down want are we going to do maybe we could
stop screaming first and plan it before we do any
think

else

SELF ASSESSMENT

Making sure that it is the right place.  making sure that it makes sense.

Pair assessment

You need to work on re reading it to make it make sense and some punctuation

I like how you used a capital letter for the start of the sentence.

descriptive writing

This week for writing Mrs Clark gave us a task about frogs and alligators. We had to put the thing that are common with both in the middle. And things that are not come with each other  on the sides.
we had to put it in the right place to no what is different to them both this as a fun activity to do for literacy  maybe I could try some new animals.